“Why is it you that always falls asleep Lucy” Asked Miss Italiano. “I don’t know why” Complained Lucy.It was another boring day back in 1870 and Lucy had fallen asleep again. “You better not fall asleep again or I will bring out the cane!” Said Miss Italiano.
It was yet another time Lucy had been told off and the last. Lucy was small but very drowsy and falls asleep in even the most complicated times. If she falls asleep again there will be trouble. As Lucy walked home on the main street she heard a threatening bullet. Everybody was frantic and started rushing to the shops. It was the troopers.
She rushed to the jewelry shop. Where it wasn’t packed, she was really worried. And even in a time like this she was really drowsy. She struggled to stay awake. I can stop you from worrying. I have a horse out the back but we have to be quiet.The jewelry shop became quiet. “Lets go” He exclaimed.
Quietly everybody got into the cart. And he dropped everyone off. I got home and ran inside.
” Mum where is dad ?”
“In the mines. But he forgot his license. He is never coming home” She said with her eyes filled with tears.
“Why is he so forgetful?”
They story I wrote has an intriguing question at the very start and one at the very end. This intrigues the reader to read more. I could have chosen out of an: intriguing question, feeling, intense action, sound affects and sensory description. For example my first paragraph: “Why is it you that always falls asleep Lucy?” Asked Miss Italiano. And my last paragraph:”Why is he so forgetful?”
We also had to do a paragraph sandwich. Which is a paragraph that has a filling for example.
It has to have a topic sentence to explain the topic. Then topic there comes a supporting sentence which is supporting the topic sentence. After the supporting sentence there comes a detail sentence which is supporting the supporting sentence. After that there comes a closing sentence which is closing of the paragraph. The title of this story was chosen after the story because that is when it is the best time to chose it because you can go over your writing and and come up with one that suits the story.